Hypoxia and Medicine

RHH: Rate/Hate this verse!?!?

1-10 and a good instrumental plz? woke up sweaty, gash to the head/ outta oxygen, cellular phone is dead/ coughin' n, spittin' blood, saliva saturation/ turnin' red, head swelling ruinin' my concentration/ im fed...up, hurt from the outside to the inner/ ponderin' what happened, wanna be home for dinner/ lifted from the base of the ground, thought I was in hell/ non belief, look what was found, clearly pronounced/ knees drop, had to announce, started crying/ a deceased female witha tummy bigger than mine/ not hard to define, she was most definitely a pregnant teen,/ just by the way she was built, should I flee the scene/ and forever hold my life filled up with guilt/ light headed now, feelin' like i'm walking on stilts/ there i was, stuck witha life changing decision/ should I run from this?, or should I settle for prison?/ will have 2 more verses if good

Public Comments

1. Looks like a rock song.
2. Because this is a story of a car accident it is one that is well served. This is something that has personally touched my life (aside from the pregnant teenager) and people need to hear how it looks and feels. I think you did an excellent job of describing from the 1st person how it would be to be in an accident and "wake up" and realize what has just happened. 8.7/10 Peace, Love & Happiness
3. i liked it.